WISHWORLD UPDATE!

Wish World, Chapter One, Part One, Draft One

Anniversary, Shmanniversary.

All Jana knew was she was bored. Bored bored bored. What was it about grown ups that make certain dates so important that she had to get dressed up in uncomfortable shoes, sit quietly for an hour and be bored bored bored while they stared at each other over candlelight. She poked at her asparagus. Even the food was boring. There was so much for the eight year old to be doing right now than trying to figure out where asparagus came from. The back scales of some kind of reptile, she thought.

She was looking up at the ceiling tiles again, trying to make shapes in the stucco while waiting for the waitress to come around with dessert when her parents, for the first time since the main course, acknowledged her.

"I need go powder my nose, dear, do you need to go to before we head home?" Jana shook her head at her mother, anything to just get home sooner. Jana shifted in her seat, Momma never took too long in the bathroom and they'd be home pretty soon, as long as Dad didn't get up as well.

Jana watched as Dad got out of the booth as well…and then, to her horror…never reached for his wallet. "I'm gonna go as well, kiddo. I'll be right back." As he shuffled off, Jana sank down in her seat, and poked the asparagus again. She'd be here a while.

"You'll get more good out of that asparagus if you eat it. Pushing it around your plate is cute, but unless its running a race, it's not gonna win any awards, hun." Jana looked up into the friendly clear blue eyes of her waitress and smiled. At least she was paying attention. "Any room for dessert?"

Jana picked herself up. "Oh, yes. But I gotta wait for momma to say it's okay."

The waitress beamed, "Well, think about what you'd really like and I'll come back with the check. Just have your folks ask for Sylvia."

"Anything that I want?"

"Anything you'd like, hun."

"I'd like everyone on the planet to get their wish."

Sylvia, smirked. "That's a tall order…I don't think Earl in the back could cook that up."

The eight year old smirked. "Then everyone in the diner."

And with that, the world warped.

I haven't written prose since 1992. It's all been scripts and comics, which are GO GO GO! for action. Finishing the first part in under a page surprised the hell out of me, and I'm worried that it's running too too fast, but at the same time, it did what it needed: dive us into the story. Hopefully it's not too too too fast.

Part 2 is Jana finding Sylvia again, Part 3 is meeting Vengeance and Part 4 is the denoument.

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