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dolariSpoilers: Story refinements and elements.
Why have a flood destructed Arios City, AND then have the tribes lose communication after its rebuilt. Have the flood break the ties between the tribes. Make Arios City bigger than originally planned so it can "spread out" more believably.
Begin the story in modern times, in the modern day Herra. A thriving metropolis. Start with a young boy of about 5 wanting to hear the story about how the earth was created. The father begins the scientific explanation, but the boy doesn't want that...he wants the STORY. Begin telling the creation myth, when we come back from the myth, it is now 12000 BC, and the father and sun are Arios tribe members.
End on the same note in reverse, but with the son now the father telling his child the story.
Have four people know the way to Arios. The first two are the first lsot envoys. The last two are the last two envoys who bring yet another two to show them the way to the city. They're lost too.
Why have a flood destructed Arios City, AND then have the tribes lose communication after its rebuilt. Have the flood break the ties between the tribes. Make Arios City bigger than originally planned so it can "spread out" more believably.
Begin the story in modern times, in the modern day Herra. A thriving metropolis. Start with a young boy of about 5 wanting to hear the story about how the earth was created. The father begins the scientific explanation, but the boy doesn't want that...he wants the STORY. Begin telling the creation myth, when we come back from the myth, it is now 12000 BC, and the father and sun are Arios tribe members.
End on the same note in reverse, but with the son now the father telling his child the story.
Have four people know the way to Arios. The first two are the first lsot envoys. The last two are the last two envoys who bring yet another two to show them the way to the city. They're lost too.
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Date: 2006-12-08 11:50 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2006-12-14 10:21 am (UTC)I like adding little things like that...adds verisimilitude.
Heck, I KNOW who these tribal people are, where they're going and how it works in the real world...I'm just not saying because I like the idea that this could be "anywhere."